Do You Still Think Of Me?
The cold days we once spent together left the month of love, dark and empty
At the end of the day do you wish you never met me?
Left alone the next day no where to turn
Seems like everything was just left to burn
You were the one that brought the “old” me back
Now i’m unrecognizable, not even my iphone recognizes me
Do you think of me on the days you’re all alone?
A love that was thought to be never ending
Signs of love that were meant to be received but aren’t sending
Your presence was soft like a cloud
I would only look for you in a large crowd
From being together everyday to a complete blackout
Like the feeling as a kid being put in timeout
Do you still think of me on the days you’re all alone?
The rope tied at the end of both hearts, felt like the love from a mother
The chocolate smell in the air reminds me of each other
I woke up from what i thought was real
The love i once could feel
Ends at the end of both ropes when they burn
At the end of the day do you wish you never met me?
You create several figurative comparisons that are vivid and relatable. I think my favorite is “like the feeling of a kid in time out” because we can all understand what that’s like.
this is really well written, I really like the repetition of questions in this poem!
I love this so much, it’s very relatable to people who have been or are currently in a break up. My favorite line is “You were the one that brought the “old” me back”. The only thing I would change is to make your i’s uppercase.
I really enjoyed reading your writing. I liked how you took the unconventional approach and made your memory writing into a poem. The rhyme you used also added a really nice touch to this piece.
I really liked this because its easy for a lot of people to relate to. It is written really well aswell.